June 26, 2007

Crawly Haiku


One daddy longlegs
makes a mountain of our tent –
we watch from inside.


"Ants belong outside,"
he announces, fist gently
cradling one.

(Thanks to the women of One Deep Breath
for their continuing inspiration.)

10 comments:

  1. I love the image of the daddy longlegs climbing your tent-mountain! Really nice. And your son saying "ants belong outside" while cradling one in his fist is really cute. He looks like a sweet kid, too!

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  2. I like the implication of not only camping, but family camping. I really like the image of the daddy longlegs climbing up the tent.

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  3. watching a granddaddy long legs move captures me every time. I followed one around my kitchen a couple of weeks ago...and wrote about one this week, too. Loved the image of watching him from inside a tent!

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  4. I love it! Old Daddy Longlegs climbing the tent, while y'all watch from inside. Beautiful.

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  5. hey, that was sweet! :)

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  6. That first one is quite intriguing and fun. :-)

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  7. Love the first one - great to image what our everyday objects seem like to our insect friends.

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  8. Being able to watch a mountain climber in action. How lucky. Wonderful haiku. Love the gentle nature of your son.

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  9. Anonymous8:28 AM

    glad he protects tenderly the little ones in life. a good sign.

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Thanks for sharing your thoughts!