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April 13, 2015
private garden —
the turned down corners
of her seed catalog (My friend Rachel Wente-Chaney kindly responded in kind! Thanks, Rachel!) Shelley in her bed Seed catalog ink on cheek Dreams of planting soon
Often haiku work best when we don't have our own selves too heavily present.
The first line sets the context and lets us know we will visit someone's private garden, at home, and we await expectedly.
The last two lines (the phrase response) do not shout or gush but quietly pick on a small aspect of a person's gardening habit, and that they take a particular joy in it.
Haiku are not loud or obvious, and are open to each reader making it their own poem, and adding their own response.
2 comments:
Another fine haiku.
Often haiku work best when we don't have our own selves too heavily present.
The first line sets the context and lets us know we will visit someone's private garden, at home, and we await expectedly.
The last two lines (the phrase response) do not shout or gush but quietly pick on a small aspect of a person's gardening habit, and that they take a particular joy in it.
Haiku are not loud or obvious, and are open to each reader making it their own poem, and adding their own response.
warm regards,
Alan
Alan's haiku blog: Area 17 blog weblink
Thanks so much, Alan... I'm so pleased that you took the time to read and comment.
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